Some of you

Some of me

Some of we

can be free

Love you feel

Can be real

Keep it togehter and it will last forever.

OR

Some of you

Some of me

Some of us

Can be lost

Free can be real, Love can be seen

We dont need pain or/and cold cause we, hold on

Live and be grand and we keep stand.

which "poem" is best? Just came up with them...

I'm not the best one on doing poems or what to call it.

but I try and it's so fun. Because when you really do something you are happy with, it feels so good!

 

Moa Eriksson

28 januari 2010 21:14

I think the first was better (:

http://moa-eriksson.bloggplatsen.se

 

maria

28 januari 2010 21:15

Nice.

http://mariaslekrum.bloggagratis.se

 

linnea

28 januari 2010 22:05

Hello!
you wanted me to read your poems, and i think they are both good. i really liked the rhymes, and the rhythm. They are both interesting and i think you could develop them even more, good start and keep going on! (I hope you understand what i mean, it is the first time someone ever wanted my opinion in poems.)
good luck

http://etttidsfrdrivattdfr.bloggplatsen.se

 

bella

29 januari 2010 14:06

heheh thanks how are you today?

http://moonbell.blogg.se

 

stella

29 januari 2010 14:11

Hi! my english isn´t the best.. =) but i liked the second poem best.. maybe because it all didnt sound the same like the first one.. keep going!

http://vardagstrams.bloggplatsen.se

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